I. Oh. I. Oh, Christ. This was wonderful. It, I, oh geez. This hurts, it really does, in all the best ways. Poor McGee, poor poor McGee.
When those same large hands fell on his belt buckle, beginning to tug at that with the same gentle motions, all McGee could do was tense until the realization dawned on him what, exactly, Tony was doing. "No, DiNozzo." A hand against his chest, pushing him off. "No." Opening the door and practically shoving him out. "Go."
God, Tony! Way to scare the crap out of your subordinate! This paragraph absolutely killed me, it really did. Poor McGee, he's so scared, and Tony, argh you moron!
In short, I love this to death and am bookmarking it. You need to write more fic! The only real problem I can define here is some pacing issues; I'll see if I can't put my finger on it.
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Date: 2009-05-05 02:41 am (UTC)When those same large hands fell on his belt buckle, beginning to tug at that with the same gentle motions, all McGee could do was tense until the realization dawned on him what, exactly, Tony was doing. "No, DiNozzo." A hand against his chest, pushing him off. "No." Opening the door and practically shoving him out. "Go."
God, Tony! Way to scare the crap out of your subordinate! This paragraph absolutely killed me, it really did. Poor McGee, he's so scared, and Tony, argh you moron!
In short, I love this to death and am bookmarking it. You need to write more fic! The only real problem I can define here is some pacing issues; I'll see if I can't put my finger on it.
Great first post!